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Band 4

In recent years more and more people are choosing to read e-books rather than paper books.do the advantages of e-books outweigh their disadvantages?

Since
corona
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 pandemic happened ,
people
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 prefer to read from online
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applications
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 whether it is e-news or
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books
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 .Nowadays
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 number of
people
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 assert that
e-
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books
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 are far better to buy as
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compared
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 to physical
books
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 because
e-
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books
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 have more
advantages
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 in the form of
cost saving
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 ,less
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 and eco-friendly means not harmful for the
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.
However
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, it has some drawbacks
also
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availability
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the availability
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 of non-accurate data and
lack
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the lack
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 of e-versions of all
books
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. Certainly, the
advantages
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 of
e-
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books
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 overlap its
disadvantages
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. Let us examine the same in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin
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 with, there are multifarious benefits of
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books
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which
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that
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 cannot be ignored.
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 and foremost,
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books
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 are not only
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 but
also
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 take less
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 in the device. To clarify, after lockdown has
announced
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,
people
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 become very hygienic so they have
keen
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a keen
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 interest to purchase
books
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 online. Due to the advancement in technology, all aged
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specially
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 youngsters realize that
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books
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 are cheap in price and it does not contain any
space
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 on tablet or shelves to make a heap of
books
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that is
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 why they download free
e-
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books
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 who consists
upto
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up to
 300MB approximately in phones or tablets. As a consequence,
demand
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the demand
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of
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paper
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books
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are
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 decreasing in the market. To exemplify,
a
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painstaking research conducted by
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the University
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 of British Columbia in Vancouver, Canada in May 2018 on a group of 5000
people
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specially
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 students ranging between 20 to 25 years old clearly revealed that 60% of them were keenly interested
to
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 opting
e-
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books
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 for reading
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purposes
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 as it had no financial investment and did not
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 much
space
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.
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,
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books
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 are
also
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perfect
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the perfect
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 choice to protect the
environment
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 from harmful gases of burning. To expatiate, once
people
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 read the
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books
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, they do not need to think about how to destroy
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them
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 by burning or they can simply delete
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books
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.
As a result
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, the
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 is safe from
this
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 pollution of burning
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paper based
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books
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 which are printed with carbon and ink that cause risky disease. To cite an example, in a recent survey conducted by WHO in
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the USA
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 in 2016 over a group of 700
people
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 of age ranging from 20-40 years revealed that
as
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88% of
people
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 believed that
e-
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books
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 save the
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 just because there was no property to burn the gases along with
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 in case of
e-
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books
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On the contrary
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, there are certainly some
disadvantages
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. Primarily, contents are not reliable and some e-versions are not available
of
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 all
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books
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. To elaborate, all
books
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 do not publish their e-versions online as holly
books
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 might be only one original
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paper based
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books
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.
Consequently
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,
old
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the old
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 generation
stiil
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still
 go for
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paper based
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books
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 because they have strong faith
on
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 content
are
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that are
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 more accurate. Some authors do not release their
next
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books
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 so variation is very less seen in
e-
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books
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. To illustrate, in a survey conducted by UNICEF in
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the USA
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 in 2016 over a group of 250 adults of age ranging from 20-46 years old revealed that 78.5% liked to gain knowledge from
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paper based
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books
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 because of inadequate versions and contents were copied from
unreliable
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an unreliable
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 source. To encapsulate, it can be concluded that
people
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 are interested to purchase
e-
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books
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 because it has more
advantages
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such
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 as
cheap
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being cheap
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 in cost,
take
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taking
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 lesser
space
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 and protecting the
environment
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.
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hand
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 it has
disadvantages
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 as
e-
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e-version
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version
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versions
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 are not published of all
books
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 and
sometime
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sometimes
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 data is not correct so
advantages
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 outweigh its
disadvantages
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.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • environmental impact
  • sustainability
  • interactive features
  • accessibility
  • vast library
  • promotions
  • deforestation
  • visual impairments
  • reading disabilities
  • burden
  • enhance
  • save money
  • reading experience
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