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There have been major advances in technology over recent decades and this has led to significant improvements in people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
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 modern scenario,
technology
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 is increasing by leaps and bounds compared to the past times,
therefore
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 it has made the living standards of
people
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 higher in terms of education, medical facilities and many more.I firmly accord with
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 statement.
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 essay will go into better detail with my subject view. To embark on,there are ample significantly alterations in way of individual's works after enhancing the automation.
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,there are plenty of enormously employment opportunities due to the advancement in computers.
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,these days,many individuals are tended to
commuting
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 by Ola cabs or autos,which make allow
people
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 to get a job
of
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a driver
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driver
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,which was not available in the early days for ancestors as the shortage of robotics.
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,many infections will be cured,even though
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they
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 are not curable.
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,In the past,many individuals
were died
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with
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the
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cancer,but nowadays,
this
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 disease will be cured by the process of chemotherapy,which is used to remove the cancer tumour. On another hand,improvements in
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 not only facilitate education for children but
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 for elder
people
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.
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,these days,social media has become common among multitudes
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 as YouTube,WhatsApp and Facebook.These are used to learning the information by watching videos on
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YouTube with precise information that they need,
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although
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 there are educational institutions in the modern world,the masses can be used to these kinds of amenities.
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,communication has become easier among individuals.
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,In the past,many
people
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 used to communicate through letters or they had to go to their friend's home
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 knowing the information about them,but now, it has become easy in terms of using E-mails and WhatsApp. To conclude,
technology
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 has made
people
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's lives easier compared to the past in terms of proper medications,educational and job opportunities as well as communication facilities,
thus
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technology
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 plays an indispensable role in everyone's life.
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