Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Even though there is a popular agreement that life today is harder and more uncomfortable than it was when your grandparents were children,I have a different opinion. I totally disagree with hundred dollars per month.
this
. There are two reasons why I think this
is critically important, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin
with, the world has changed since my parents
were young. Nowadays, it is easier than in the past ten years
to commute ,and people
are able to spend their lives
anywhere around the world because transportation is so convenient. My personal experience is a compelling example of this
. About five years
ago, I was planning to take a vacation to Europe for 2 weeks. My job gave two
weeks of vacation paid and I was able to request the vacations in advance to manipulate my leisure plans. Correct pronoun usage
me two
This
made my life easier when I organized. On the other hand
, when my parents
were bureaucrats, they did not have long vacations like me because there was a shortage of staff. If I had worked for the government, I would not have had a long vacation like this
. Therefore
, travelling is easier than in the past which make
my Verb problem
means
parents
were not able to travel as much as they could.
Secondly
, In this
modern life, technology
is a part of people
's lives
and it uses
easier than in the past ten Verb problem
is
years
. It helps people
to have comfortable lives
. During pandemics, people
are using technology
to work remote
, students are Change the word
remotely
also
using the benefits of technology
to take classes at home. For instance
, I have been taking classes at home for several years
since the pandemic has
started. Unnecessary verb
apply
This
does
not only Unnecessary verb
apply
save
the expenses from Correct subject-verb agreement
saves
the
public transportation but Correct article usage
apply
it is
Verb problem
apply
also
saving
Wrong verb form
saves
my
time to avoid traffic during rush hour. If I had taken public transportation, I would have paidCorrect pronoun usage
me
Correct article usage
a
However
, when my parents
were children, they were able to travel only in the country and they had to use a map for navigation because the technology
did
not easy to access. Verb problem
was
As a result
, technology
will make people
’s lives
are convenient than in the past.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that I have an easier and better activity than my parents
had just a few decades ago. This
is because I enjoy much more leisure time than they did and because technology
is easier than in the past to access.Submitted by mafrey_playgirl on
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Task Response
The response partially addresses the prompt, presenting both agreement and disagreement with the statement. It would be better to clearly take a stand and provide examples to support the chosen position.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, but the logical structure could be improved. Try to organize the ideas into clear paragraphs with topic sentences and supporting details. Additionally, ensure that ideas are linked logically.
Lexical Resource
The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary and uses a variety of sentence structures. However, there are instances of word choice and expression that could be more accurate and appropriate for the context.
Grammatical Range
The essay shows a good command of grammatical structures and uses a range of sentence types. However, there are some errors in verb tense consistency and word form that affect clarity and precision.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.