Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Even though there is a popular agreement that life today is harder and more uncomfortable than it was when your grandparents were children,I have a different opinion. I totally disagree with
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. There are two reasons why I think
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is critically important, which I will explore in the following essay.
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with, the world has changed since my
parents
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were young. Nowadays, it is easier than in the past ten
years
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to commute ,and
people
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are able to spend their
lives
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anywhere around the world because transportation is so convenient. My personal experience is a compelling example of
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. About five
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ago, I was planning to take a vacation to Europe for 2 weeks. My job gave
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me two
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weeks of vacation paid and I was able to request the vacations in advance to manipulate my leisure plans.
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made my life easier when I organized.
On the other hand
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, when my
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were bureaucrats, they did not have long vacations like me because there was a shortage of staff. If I had worked for the government, I would not have had a long vacation like
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.
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, travelling is easier than in the past which
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my
parents
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were not able to travel as much as they could.
Secondly
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, In
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modern life,
technology
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is a part of
people
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's
lives
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and it
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easier than in the past ten
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. It helps
people
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to have comfortable
lives
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. During pandemics,
people
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are using
technology
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to work
remote
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, students are
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using the benefits of
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to take classes at home.
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, I have been taking classes at home for several
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since the pandemic
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started.
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does
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not only
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the expenses from
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apply
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public transportation but
it is
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also
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saving
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my
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time to avoid traffic during rush hour. If I had taken public transportation, I would have paid
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a
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hundred dollars per month.
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, when my
parents
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were children, they were able to travel only in the country and they had to use a map for navigation because the
technology
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did
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not easy to access.
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,
technology
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will make
people
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’s
lives
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are convenient than in the past. In conclusion, I strongly believe that I have an easier and better activity than my
parents
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had just a few decades ago.  
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is because I enjoy much more leisure time than they did and because
technology
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is easier than in the past to access.
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Task Response
The response partially addresses the prompt, presenting both agreement and disagreement with the statement. It would be better to clearly take a stand and provide examples to support the chosen position.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, but the logical structure could be improved. Try to organize the ideas into clear paragraphs with topic sentences and supporting details. Additionally, ensure that ideas are linked logically.
Lexical Resource
The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary and uses a variety of sentence structures. However, there are instances of word choice and expression that could be more accurate and appropriate for the context.
Grammatical Range
The essay shows a good command of grammatical structures and uses a range of sentence types. However, there are some errors in verb tense consistency and word form that affect clarity and precision.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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