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Pocket Money should be given to children. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Some people argue that parents should give some
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 to
children
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 so that they have the chance to purchase something they like or learn how to manage budgets from a young age. From my perspective,
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money
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 can be earned by making some effects if
children
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 want to have some
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. Not only can make
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 happy
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 but
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 is a beneficial way to help them to develop financial consciousness by giving them some
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money
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. When they own some
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 by themselves , they can use it freely to buy something they like,
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 as favourite toys, tasty snacks or interesting books, which will contribute to huge happiness for kids.
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, when they have the freedom to manage their own
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, some of them would gradually realize to save them or do some small business from an early age , which will enormously improve their financial management when they grow up ,
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 avoiding them stuck in financial problems for the future. While there are some adverse impacts on
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 if they receive
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money
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 for free.
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 is because the majority of kids do not have the ability to control their
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 well and will end up wasting all of them.
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, some
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 are addicted to computer games and will spend all their
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money
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 on games , worse, borrow
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 from others.
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, if
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 are looking for some
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, they can earn it by doing some work for parents or neighbours,
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 as walking the dog or cleaning the garden. As long as they know it is not easy to get the
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 , the more chance they will cherish the
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. In conclusion,I believe
children
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 should have some
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money
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 since they can enjoy life and learn how to manage
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 ;
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 , they should make some
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 by themselves, only
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 way, they will know how to use
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 properly.
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