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Some people argue that practical experience is the most important part of a successful career. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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When someone is applying for a job , employers are usually seeking
for
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a rewarding background and appropriate
skills
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 of an employee. It is believed that it is the most vital component of a job. A number of people disagree with
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 statement . My opinion is different because even though all
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 is known it is rather hard to achieve something without practical
skills
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 and
experience
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. Practical knowledge in the exact sphere of the work is crucial. In a job field, various different questions may occur and the only way of solving it by using acquired
experience
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. Experienced staff with practical
skills
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 solve problems at work with ease and are often ready to help others because it has happened to them before and the lesson is learned and secured by practice.
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 , many business places value experienced workers because not only they are able to solve issues smoothly but
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 always help their coworkers.
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: one office worker with many years of wisdom all the time helps other junior workers who might have only theoretical
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 their age.
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 , having only practical background and
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 is not always a good idea. In a
workplace
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 there might be issues that are solved not only with
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 but
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 with
theory
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. Working as a teacher is a great example. Teachers should know all aspects of teaching which are both
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 and
experience
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. So both
skills
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 are equal . In spite of that, I still believe that
experience
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 is the one thing
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 needed because all the
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theory
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 that might have been missed could be easily acquired by years of practice. In conclusion ,
experience
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 and practical
skills
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 are the most crucial part of working but there might be moments when it is only possible to solve a question with theoretical knowledge. Still, I believe that to be a successful employee
experience
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 is needed more.
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Introduction
Make sure your introduction clearly presents your viewpoint on the topic, providing a brief overview of the arguments you will be discussing. This sets a clear direction for your essay.
Essay Structure
Develop your main body paragraphs by focusing on one main idea per paragraph. Use clear topic sentences to introduce the idea, and follow up with examples or explanations to support your points. This structure enhances coherence.
Cohesion
Use linking words and phrases effectively to guide the reader through your arguments. This includes connectors like "However," "For instance," and "In conclusion." Proper use of these words will improve the flow of your essay.
Examples
Expand on your examples by providing more specific details. While you do include examples, further elaborating on them can strengthen your argument and make your essay more persuasive.
Task Response
While you have a clear position, make sure to fully address the prompt by discussing why you might disagree with the opposing viewpoint in a more detailed manner. This will ensure a more complete response to the task.
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