some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Some people advocate that our modern
life
caused too many choices
and available options
. In my opinion, Correct article usage
the numbers
numbers
of our Fix the agreement mistake
number
choices
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on different parameters including the place we live, economic level and many more factors, Change the verb form
depend
although
dramatic
increase Add an article
the dramatic
a dramatic
of
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in
options
is undeniable. Generally, choices
play a key role in everyone's life
. Some of these choices
have short term effect
, while others influence our Fix the agreement mistake
effects
life
permanently. Nowadays, with increasing technologies and expanding interpersonal connections, especially in developed countries, our options
increased significantly. Marriage and opting job are two typical examples of choice
that can construct or Fix the agreement mistake
choices
ruine
our Correct your spelling
ruin
prosperous
and happiness during our Replace the word
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lifetime
life time
. Correct your spelling
lifetime
For instance
, now people can date internationally and think to marry
a person from a Wrong verb form
marrying
further
continent with completely
different perspective of Add an article
a completely
life
. Another obvious example in this
regard is selecting job
. In previous Add an article
a job
time
, people had to continue their Fix the agreement mistake
times
parents
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parent's
parents'
job
or opt Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
from
a narrow list of jobs. At present time, not only former jobs are available, but Change preposition
for
also
a wide variety of jobs were added to that list, like being an online influencer or a financial advisor. This
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,
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apply
to
simply Change preposition
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a young person. In fact, the ability to know different feasible Wrong verb form
confusing
options
and comparing
their merits and drawbacks cause making Wrong verb form
compare
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the decision
a decision
decision
to be harder than past. According to marriage psychologists, individuals who are connecting with Fix the agreement mistake
decisions
high
number of persons have the highest rate of problems in selecting their permanent partner. In conclusion, I Change the article
a high
the high
concure
with Correct your spelling
concur
this
fact that modern life
increased our options
in different aspects of life
, specially
in more developed countries.Replace the word
especially
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite