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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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 in scientific
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, business, and the academic
world
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 has been improving the development of many global aspects. Due to the accessibility issues, it is proposed that the
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 should be accessed freely.
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, rejections
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 come to
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 idea as it is perceived that the
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 is too important and too valuable to be accessed freely. In my view, the proposal of giving
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free
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 to scientific
research
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 is strongly worth to be implemented. Despite my opinion,
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 aspects of
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 discussion. It is true that some
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 is too valuable to be freely given. To publish a journal in a leading journal publisher in the
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, it is undeniable that the publishing fee is not cheap. Not only publishing fee, the sacrificed times and efforts
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 costs the
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 with the arms and legs. Paid
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 to the scientific journal will give the incentive to
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 and will keep the quality of the journal. Despite
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the mentioned benefit of paid
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scientific
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,
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free
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also
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 makes a lot of promising
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. As we know, the purpose of scientific
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 is to spread the newest ideas,
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, and contribute more to
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society. Qualified
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 is important in developing nations and formulating
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regulations. It already runs in
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scientist
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 to give their best to spread the knowledge. With free
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of
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 scientific journals, all can reach the same knowledge from different parts of the
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. A study in Oxford can be read by people in Indonesia and it can influence
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another scientist
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scientist
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 to dip more about the
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. It opens many expectant collaborations and
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innovations
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 between
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scientist
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scientists
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 all over the
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. To be concluded, the idea of spreading the
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 journal as a free thing is a great idea to be executed.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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