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the alteration of the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008.

The given maps illustrate the alteration of the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some developments were made in it in 2008. Overall, there were noticeable transformations after the construction take place and the significant changes can be seen in the addition of extra facilities. In 1998, the museum is fairly simple, with an entrance at the south of the building. The tickets box was right after the entrance towards the west of which was the temporary
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room
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, while towards the east of that a shop, a toilet and a bags and coats
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 can be seen. The garden was there in the centre, towards the north of which was a cafe. On each side of these, towards the west and the east were permanent
exhibition
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 rooms. The enormous changes can be seen in 2008, the garden remained in its place, with the addition of the cafe with sitting area and two fountains. The bags and coats rooms were there in place of the temporary
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room
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,which was moved to the area of the permanent
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room
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 on the west, above
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room
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, the restaurant was constructed. The cafe retained its site, but its size was smaller to make way for the relocation of the toilet.
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, the entrance and the ticket box were not changed.

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