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In some countries, private cars are now banned from certain city centres. What are the advantages of such a system and do you feel that this is something that most cities should adopt?

#countries #cars #city #centres #system #cities
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Banning
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centers
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 is a recent
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 and it can be seen in various cities around the world. Certain advantages and disadvantages immediately spring to mind when considering
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 step that
city
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 councils are taking. The advantages are clear. Since
cars
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 were introduced,
city
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centres
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 have always been areas where air quality is poor due to the
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 of emissions, which in turn affects
people
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's health.
City
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centers
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 become
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quieter
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 and safer for
people
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 to wander around shopping and
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 themselves. Access to the
city
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centers
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 still can be good, at it is usually only private vehicles that are banned, are busses and taxes can still take
people
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 in and
outof
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out of
 the
city
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centres
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 areas. Many towns
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 operate a park and ride scheme, so
people
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 can leave their car in safe car parking in the outskirts of towns and travel
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 a dedicated bus service to the town
centres
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. It would seem hard to
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criticise
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 kind of scheme. There are critics though to the scheme of banning
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 in the
city
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centres
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.
City
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centers
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 shop keepers have often been vocal opponents, as they
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believe
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belive
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 that fewer
people
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 will come to the
city
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center
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 and
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 their incomes will be affected. The general public
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 sometimes object, as
people
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 like to travel in their own private vehicles. In actual facts, banning
cars
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 from the
city
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centres
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 has in practise not
reduse
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reduce
 the number of
people
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 who travel to the
city
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center
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 to shops.
People
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 like shopping and socializing in the
city
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centres
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 and they just adapt to the situation. There is no answer to
people
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 who want to
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their
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 own
cars
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. They hopefully just realise that the sacrifice of not driving their own
cars
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 is outweighed by the health and lifestyle improvements if a cleaner and
quiter
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quieter
city
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 centre. In conclusion, there are far more advantages to banning
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 from
city
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centres
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 than allowing them. It is
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 a measure that most
city
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centres
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 should
adoprt
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adopt
 for their citizens.
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