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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages

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Since we are living in a multicultural society, multi-language speakers could lead to many doors in children's life. Some educational professionals argue that learning other languages in early childhood is more effective than in the teenage period. I agree with
this
 notion as a child in primary school has abilities to learn faster.
To begin
 with, there are numerous studies that have consistently found that children's brian who have is below 7-year-old, have a higher ability to learn a new language, due to fresh and naive experiences. Without past experience, toodles are not afraid of making a mistake,
therefore
, they are able to absorb things rapidly.
In addition
, studying at
this
 age will open more opportunities for them
such
 as continuing studying for higher education abroad where they already speak that language.
As a result
, they will have less suffering from relearning other languages.
On the other hand
, there are
also
 several drawbacks that if students learn the language from unprofessional
teachers
 or not native speakers, it can lead to misunderstanding and misuse in the future.
For example
, a recent survey by Institution A showed that there is a significant number of unqualified
teachers
 in leading grammar schools. Most of the pupils have highly talented in English subject in reading and writing parts,
however
, their speaking part is underperformed, which means the
teachers
 taught speaking in English incorrectly. In conclusion, there are some downsides of teaching foreign primary school students from hiring unqualified
teachers
,
however
, the benefit of fast-learner ability in young children still outweigh these negative aspects.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive abilities
  • pronunciation
  • self-conscious
  • cultural awareness
  • global society
  • proficiency levels
  • competitive job market
  • foundational skills
  • qualified teachers
  • recreational activities
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