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You should spend about 40 mins. Write about the following topic: Some believe that we should invent a new language for international communication. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Some
people
 argue that a new
language
 ought to be invented so that communication among the countries becomes far easier. In my opinion, there are more disadvantages than advantages to doing so as
this
 will not only make translators lose their jobs but the implementation will require a lot of
time
. On one hand, it is undeniable that a
language
 in common will provide
people
 with opportunities to communicate with one another internationally without any
language
 barrier.
For example
, when
people
 travel or do globetrotting, they will not have to rely heavily on
translation
, which means that they may not have to spend a fortune on hiring tour guides and other
translation
 services. Another advantage is that it will allow businesses to thrive better as they can do business transactions with companies globally without the need to invest in hiring employees who do the
translation
.
On the other hand
, the invention of a new global
language
 may lead to the redundancy of some employees.
In other words
, the job vacancies for positions
such
 as tourist guides and translators will become scarce because
people
 do not need
translation
 anymore.
Moreover
, it will take a long
time
 for
people
 around the world to start using the newly invented
language
. There may be adults who are reluctant to invest their precious
time
 in learning a new
language
 while they can easily hire a translator during business trips.
Also
, it will be financially demanding and
time
-consuming to conduct teacher training in order to equip the teachers with the skills and knowledge about that particular
language
. In conclusion, I believe it is better not to create a new
language
 as it will take a lot of
time
 and effort to encourage
people
 to start using it despite the convenience of communication.
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