Some high schools require all students to wear school uniforms. Other high schools permit students to decide what to wear to school. Which of these two school policies do you think is better?

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Good morning, everyone, and thank you all for coming to listen to me today. Before we start, let me ask you a question
first
. How many of you think that we should establish a
school
council
in our
school
? Today, I am going to talk about
school
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the school

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council
. For the start, I am going to present its advantages,
then
disadvantages and my own opinion at the end.
First
of all, the advantage of the
school
council
is that it gives
students
the chance to actively participle in changing their
school
environment. I have read about a study recently, which states if the
school
places the involvement of their
students
at heart,
then
the benefits and opportunities for both the
students
and the
school
are significantly increased.
Also
, a
school
council
motivate
students
to make a difference by inviting them
shape
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to shape

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their future
school
life, as they have been given the chance to present their views, by using their own voices to express their needs and concerns.
For example
, a curriculum
that is
not solely developed by the teacher but
also
with the
students
can motivate them to learn.
However
, some people argue that there are
also
disadvantages of establishing a
school
council
and their main argument is that the
council
is a waste of time. The
students
often have the feeling that they have a say but, in the end, nothing really happens. Personally, I think that it is not really the problem of the
council
or of the
students
, but the teachers. As it is teachers’ job to report the problems to each other and not just ignore them. To avoid
this
kind
thing
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of thing

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to happen, I think that the involvement should not just be lip service but should
also
include action. Both form the
students
and the teachers. To conclude, I think that the
establishing
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establishment

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of a
school
council
bring more good than harm
on
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to

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the
students
.
However
, the
council
and the
students
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advice
advices
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advice
pieces of advice
bits of advice

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should
also
be taken seriously by the teachers and the
council
should be a way to encourage the
students
to become involved in changing the
school
, not discouraging them from
this
.
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