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Some people believe that children should spend all of their free time with their parent. Other believe that this is unnecessary or even negative. Discuss the possible arguments on both sides, and say which side you personally support.

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Parents
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 play an important role in the upbringing and development of their offspring and no one can deny it. Some are of the opinion that youngsters should allocate all of their free
time
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 to their families and some others would argue
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. In my opinion, for the purpose of healthy and balanced rearing,
children
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 should be able to go out and explore with their peers as well as be
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 some quality
time
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 with their family. on the one hand, it is evident that any parent would want to accommodate and nurture their child in the most complete and safe development environment. by doing so,
Parents
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 can monitor
children
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’s development and even can make some necessary suggestions if their
children
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 misbehave. If
parents
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 play with their
children
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 more
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 they will learn how to be more sociable.
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, being with the family
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 gives
children
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 good protection and reduce the risk of falling victim to crimes
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 as abduction, human trafficking or bullying and negative influence due to pressure from peers.
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 the
children
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 are strongly suggested to spend most of their
time
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 with their
parents
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,
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 does not mean that they are not encouraged to interact with the outside world because it’s
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 a good environment for
children
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 to develop their interpersonal and social skills through interaction with their peers. In some cases, it is impossible to take much care of
children
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 when they live in a family
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 dual-income or has one parent as a breadwinner. in
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 case, Child-minding and after-school childcare can be perfectly viable alternatives. In conclusion, I believe that in order for
children
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 to be fully developed both physically and mentally,
parents
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 should spend
time
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 with their
children
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 and
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 let their
children
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 interact with the outside world.
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