Some people think international cooperation has brought benefits to world environment protection, while some people think more benefits has been brought to international business. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In
this
globalization era where the
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border-line seems blurred, every nation is well connected.
Therefore
, international cooperation is managed to work together on tackling global challenges,
such
as environmental
protection
. Meanwhile, some believe that the only benefit from
such
collaboration is
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economic growth. There are valid opinions on both sides which I will explore now. On the one hand, to cope
environmental
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protection
issues that happen worldwide, the
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from
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collaboration will be extremely beneficial to address.
For instance
, The Paris Agreement, a legally binding international treaty on climate change held in 2016, encouraged over 170 parties to reduce greenhouse gas emissions.
In addition
, through
this
cooperation, close to 30 countries have jointly pledged US$4.1 billion to safeguard the world’s forests, build green cities, protect threatened wildlife, and cope
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plastic pollution.
Hence
, the aim to limit global warming to well below 2 °C is highly possible to achieve in the near future by
such
collaboration.
On the other hand
, people who are opposing the view believe that cross-border cooperation is contributed more to the international market boom rather than environmental
protection
. One salient example of
this
is Freeport-McMoRan, the biggest company of copper and gold worldwide, apparently
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the fruits of its exploitation of Papua Island. The indigenous tribes claim their communities have been racked with poverty, disease, oppression and habitual degradation since the mine began operations in 1973.
Thus
, it can be clearly seen that multinational
business
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primarily target to earn
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profit than contribute to
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the environment. To sum up, I firmly believe that mutual effort among different nations has benefited with the business level which is far greater than the environment
protection
.
Therefore
, there should be stricter
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and rules to regulate
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activities to avoid the larger devastating effect on natural surroundings.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Global treaties
  • Paris Agreement
  • Climate change
  • Pollution control
  • Biodiversity preservation
  • Convention on Biological Diversity
  • Resource management
  • Trade barriers
  • Foreign direct investment
  • Economic growth
  • Technology sharing
  • Market expansion
  • Collaborative efforts
  • Environmental protection
  • International business
  • Cross-border initiatives
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