In the past, shopping was a routine domestic task. Many people nowadays regard it as a hobby. To what extent do you think this is a positive trend? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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With the development of science and technology,
people
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nowadays have a lot of approaches to
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themself,
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, shopping, sailing, and so on. It is often suggested that more and more
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like to consider
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purchasing
as a hobby rather than a daily work. In my own opinion, it is a positive trend.
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can probably improve the relationship between families and friends, and the changed shopping style will reduce the waste to a certain degree.
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the reasons.
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,
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with a routine task
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to be done, the
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shopping experience would
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people
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feel happy and they
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like to invite others to go shopping together.
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, women may make an appointment to go to Costco together; and during the wandering time, they would like to have a cup of coffee to increase their good relationships.
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, if they all have their own routine time, they can hardly sit together to have a warm conversation.
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, it is obvious that
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new purchasing experience not only can finish the daily job
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but
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their life quality and become
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with
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around.
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,
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may buy goods
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higer
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quality and
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price
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if they do the shopping as a hobby since they are willing to spend more time
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researching
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them. For
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instance, girls would like to compare the prices and
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around several shops for a specific dress.
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, they may get a perfect experience and get the exact goods they like.
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conclusion, it is clear that
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could spend less money on their life and even get better
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with these new hobbies,
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of considering
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a job. In conclusion, with the reasons talked above,
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good relationships and better life qualities can be seen as
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reasons for
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argument that it is a positive trend that
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shopping activities as hobbies rather than routine jobs.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumerism
  • retail therapy
  • materialism
  • disposable income
  • economic growth
  • financial instability
  • environmental impact
  • social interaction
  • community building
  • emotional satisfaction
  • advertising influence
  • shopping habits
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