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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#experts #children #language #school #outweigh
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In some countries, people think that the earlier
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chance
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 to learn a foreign
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, the better competency level they would have. Personally, I am inclined to
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 notion and believe that students who learn different
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 since primary school would get more advantages.
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 and foremost, one evident advantage to students who
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 good communication is the possibility
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 oversea job opportunities due to the better
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 usage is as good as natives. Experiencing since primary school will force
children
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 to learn, experience and get used to that
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 as their mother tongue.
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, the Thai and United Kingdom joint venture company,
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 in England, is hiring Thai candidates and stated in job descriptions for those who can use both
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 effectively will be a special case to consider.
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, the majority of fresh graduate students who have been hired are those who can speak English fluently.
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,
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 drawback for
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 studying different
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 can cause confusion and
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 they would not be able to keep up with
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languages
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.
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, their brains would be mixed up and they would not be able to pronounce any words correctly which obviously can affect
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 later life. According
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 survey reported that
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 aged under 5 should learn the
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 their parents have been spoken
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before letting them acquire
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language
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, 80% of
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children
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 capabilities to absorb
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 of
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 will reflect
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children
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 lack of communication skills. In conclusion, I would reiterate
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the advantages
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of learning
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languages
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 since
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 key stage would prevail over the drawbacks in terms of better job opportunities and
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the privilege
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 of getting hired.
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