The maps show the changes of Bill Hill Farm in 1976 and 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features make comparisons where relevant.

The maps show the changes of Bill Hill Farm in 1976 and 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features make comparisons where relevant.
Given maps illustrate the evolution of
Environmental
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the Environmental
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Centre from Bill Hill
Farm
during
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over
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3 decades.
Overall
,
it is clear that
radical transformations
occured
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occurred
occur
in the
farm
over the period and it was totally converted into an environmental centre. In 1976, Farmyard was situated in the heart of
Farm
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the Farm
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.
In
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On
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the top of it was Barn,
to
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and to
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the right side of
this
facility
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,facility
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there was
the
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a
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shed in order to keep cows. In the vicinity of
shed
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the shed
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located Chicken
Farm
.
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The farm
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Farm house
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Farmhouse
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was laid out on the bottom of
Farmyard
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the Farmyard
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.
Finally
, there was special storage for
farm
machines
in
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on
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the left side
in
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at
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the top. When it comes Environmental centre storage was replaced with parking.
Multimedia
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A Multimedia
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room was opened
instead
of
old
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the old
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barn facility. Previous sheds gave their place to student hosting.
Recreational
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A recreational
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area for
intertainment
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entertainment
was created in the
center
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centre
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. Only
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the farmhouse
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farmhouse
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farmhouses
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did not see any exchanges over the period.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words farm with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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