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In the past, when students pursued a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunities to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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Nowadays more and more pupils are choosing to
study
 at university outside their home countries. Looking at
this
 phenomenon, In
this
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 I will be discussing both the pros and cons of
this
 shift.
To begin
 with, In
this
 day and age due to the advancement of transportation and technology many
students
 are able to
further
 their education overseas. One of the major advantages of
this
 is the fact that they are exposed to different cultures , traditions and languages which will widen their horizon.
Moreover
, It will open for
them
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 new doors and give them the opportunity to achieve great things that they are not able to achieve in their home country
such
 as going to med school.
For instance
 , INDIA is still a developing country. A recent survey that was conducted there showed that there are almost one million Indian
students
 studying abroad and 45% of
them
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study
 in NORTH AMERICA and most of them are in the health care sector.
Furthermore
, when studying abroad
students
 are far away from their families which will teach them independence and shap their personality to be more responsible individuals and
also
 gives them a clear idea about what they will challenge in the real world.
However
, there are many cons that come with studying abroad,
First
 and foremost, a lot of
students
 that
study
 abroad do not come back to their countries after finishing and
this
 will negatively affect the country's prosperity. A recent
study
 that was done by HARVARD UNIVERSITY showed that 41% of foreign
students
 that come to the US are choosing to stay after finishing their studies because of better job opportunities.
Moreover
, most of the
students
 that travel abroad to
study
 are around the age of 18 or 19 , and because of the freedom of being away from their families they may adopt some disruptive behaviours and may end up wasting a critical time of their lives. In conclusion, we can not deny the many merits that studying abroad has.
such
 as exposing to new cultures and becoming self-dependent at a young age .
However
, one of the cardinal
disadvantage
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 is the migration of young intelligent minds .
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