There is no doubt that globalisation has benefited the world by bringing together people, business and nations. People who criticise it stand in the way of progress. To what extent do you disagree or agree?

Globalization

has changed the globe over the years, for

many

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these changes have helped different countries conduct businesses in one accord

therefore

, people that are against

this

development may hinder moving forward.

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this

opinion to an extent but

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could be some negative aspects

as a result

.

First

of all, it is undeniable that

globalization

has helped many nations develop their businesses like construction companies, clothing

industriesetc

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industries

industries etc

operate on an international level, working together has caused these major developments.

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example

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a developing country like china offers many African countries business in

construction

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the construction

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of roads and any other infrastructure doing

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has helped it increase its own income while building good looking buildings in these African nations. Even though most states in the world are benefiting from

globalization

it

also

has some disadvantages

this

is because some people are at risk of losing employment when their employer relocates.

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instance

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nowadays some manufacturing companies can move their entire business to another nation and operate internationally when

this

happens the employees from the country of origin of the company lose their jobs.

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is why despite

globalization

having brought the globe some benefits it

also

has affected it negatively. In

conclusion

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although

globalization

has helped many nations and businesses operate internationally

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therefore

enabling

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the progression of the world it has

also

affected some citizens negatively by putting them at risk of losing jobs when some employers decide to relocate.