There is no doubt that globalisation has benefited the world by bringing together people, business and nations. People who criticise it stand in the way of progress. To what extent do you disagree or agree?

Globalization
has changed the globe over the years, for
many
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these changes have helped different countries conduct businesses in one accord
therefore
, people that are against
this
development may hinder moving forward.
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to
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this
opinion to an extent but
their
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could be some negative aspects
as a result
.
First
of all, it is undeniable that
globalization
has helped many nations develop their businesses like construction companies, clothing
industriesetc
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industries
industries etc
operate on an international level, working together has caused these major developments.
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a developing country like china offers many African countries business in
construction
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of roads and any other infrastructure doing
this
has helped it increase its own income while building good looking buildings in these African nations. Even though most states in the world are benefiting from
globalization
it
also
has some disadvantages
this
is because some people are at risk of losing employment when their employer relocates.
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instance
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nowadays some manufacturing companies can move their entire business to another nation and operate internationally when
this
happens the employees from the country of origin of the company lose their jobs.
This
is why despite
globalization
having brought the globe some benefits it
also
has affected it negatively. In
conclusion
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although
globalization
has helped many nations and businesses operate internationally
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therefore
enabling
in
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the progression of the world it has
also
affected some citizens negatively by putting them at risk of losing jobs when some employers decide to relocate.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international trade
  • cultural homogenization
  • multinational corporations
  • sustainable development
  • economic disparities
  • technological advancement
  • cultural exchange
  • scrutinize
  • ethics
  • innovation
  • connectivity
  • protectionism
  • outsourcing
  • free market
  • trade liberalization
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