In many cities crime is increasing. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce crime levels?

In today's world,
crime
rates are unprecedentedly high. There can be several reasons behind
this
, including unemployment and media influence, that I will elaborate on and provide some feasible solutions to in the following paragraphs. The
first
cause of commuting
crime
lies, undoubtedly, in the lack of workplaces. People, trying to make a living by working, get rejected even before the start of their career, and, since they have to satisfy at least their basic needs, see the
crime
as something particularly tempting. According to the statistics, 50% of prisoners turned to drugs or
crime
in order to earn some money, which is even more than the percentage of those, who commuted the
crime
of passion.(30%) Another reason is the influence of currently popular social media and violent online
games
that have an especially detrimental impact on teenagers and young adults. The point is,
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people from these age groups are vulnerable to external influence and tend to replicate the behavioural pattern,
however
preposterous they can be, as long as they consider them to be cool. Taking into account the fact that
crime
in media and
games
is shown as something that brings a better life, youngsters, driven by
this
, involve themselves in it.
Although
this
may seem inexorable at
first
, there are some measures that can be taken to bring the
crime
rates in the reduction. The government has to provide citizens with an adequate number of jobs, so the problem of unemployment will be eliminated. It can be done by the attraction of International companies, that,
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opening
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branches in a country will not only increase the number of jobs, but
also
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adequate training, which in the long-term future will result in more educated citizens and,
therefore
, the development of the country itself.
In addition
to
this
, censorship might contribute significantly too. If the
games
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potential to damage young minds are prohibited, there will be
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smaller likelihood of the appearance of new crimes from the younger generations, since they probably will be occupied with their personal development
instead
of playing the
games
,
such
as PUBG, or wasting their time on the websites about weapons. I will terminate my essay by emphasizing, that ways of combating
crime
, providing that they are sufficient enough, will decrease
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criminal acts.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • overcrowding
  • unemployment
  • glorifying
  • viable option
  • lack of education
  • criminal activities
  • substance abuse
  • invest
  • job creation
  • effective policing
  • community-focused
  • social services
  • addiction treatment
  • mental health support
  • technology
  • data analysis
  • prevent
  • crime hotspots
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