The bar charts below give the information about USA marriage and divorces rates between 1970 and 2000 and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the year.

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the number of

people

get married and divorced in America from 1970 to 2000 and the marital status of adult Americans in 1970 and 2000.

Overall

, there was a slight decline in the number of wedding rates over the whole 30-year period,

while

the

rate

of separation remained relatively unchanged. It is noticeable that the percentage of adults

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married was the highest in the given year.

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the first graph, the

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of marriages in the USA remained stable at 2.5

million

people

whereas

the period from 1970 to 2000 saw a significant increase in the

divorced

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rate

from 1 to around 1.5

million

people

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rest of the period, the figure for marriages fell slightly by around 0.4

million

people

. Divorces demonstrated a similar pattern with

rate

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declining to about 0.2

million

people

. In 2000, divorces at a haft the

rate

of marriages. In terms of marital status, the proportion of

people

in adulthood

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married accounted for the highest in 1970 and 2000, at 70 % and 60 % respectively. There was a gradual increase in the

rate

of adults

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get married and

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divorced. The figure for divorces tripled to around 9 % in 2000.

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