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The bar charts below give the information about USA marriage and divorces rates between 1970 and 2000 and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the year.

The bar charts below give the information about USA marriage and divorces rates between 1970 and 2000 and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the year.
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The bar chart
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 the number of
people
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 get married and divorced in America from 1970 to 2000 and the marital status of adult Americans in 1970 and 2000.
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, there was a slight decline in the number of wedding rates over the whole 30-year period,
while
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 the
rate
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 of separation remained relatively unchanged. It is noticeable that the percentage of adults
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get
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 married was the highest in the given year.
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 the first graph, the
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 of marriages in the USA remained stable at 2.5
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people
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,
whereas
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 the period from 1970 to 2000 saw a significant increase in the
divorced
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rate
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 from 1 to around 1.5
million
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people
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.
The
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 rest of the period, the figure for marriages fell slightly by around 0.4
million
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people
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. Divorces demonstrated a similar pattern with
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rate
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the rate
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 declining to about 0.2
million
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people
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. In 2000, divorces at a haft the
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 of marriages. In terms of marital status, the proportion of
people
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 in adulthood
get
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 married accounted for the highest in 1970 and 2000, at 70 % and 60 % respectively. There was a gradual increase in the
rate
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 of adults
never
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 get married and
get
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 divorced. The figure for divorces tripled to around 9 % in 2000.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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