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Some people think that the detailed criminal description on newspapers and TV has bad influences, so this kind of information should be restricted in the media. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words

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The question as to whether or not the comprehensive criminal accounts published in the press and on
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television sparked intense debate recently. Others say that
this
 kind of
information
 should be prohibited
in
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 social
media
 due to
the
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 injurious impacts on
people
. In my opinion, I strongly agree with
this
 point of view.
First
 of all, publishing detailed criminal descriptions leads to disadvantageous consequences on human mental health, especially
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 children.
People
 nowadays have access to
this
 type of violent news on a daily basis via television and publications from all across the world. Individuals who watch shows and read articles in publications that are full of grisly details and horrifying subtleties of murders on a daily basis might become accustomed to it after a time.
Moreover
, the considerable problem is that in most situations, the
media
, particularly the electronic
media
, does not specify if that bloody kind of program is suitable for youngsters or persons with heart disease. Children can be obsessed with the horrible nuances of crime and may suffer from a sense of insecurity, or
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some teenagers, they might think that those illegal
people
 are special and try to follow their violent actions, which
cause
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 the increase
of
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 crime rates.
In addition
, often the
media
 gives criminal descriptions exaggeratedly that
triggers
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 more and more same crimes
instead
 of informing
people
, which affects negatively
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the family of the accused and
also
 the victims. Tabloids and news try to find more private
information
 about the accused, and
also
 find
about
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 their relatives. The more
information
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society knows about the criminal and their family, the more negative thinking about life increases.
Moreover
, some of the community have a tendency to blame the victim despite encouraging them, which may lead to some worst cases
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 the victims - depression, scare of the public or even suicide. All things considered, the obvious conclusion to be drawn is that
although
 publishing the comprehensive criminal accounts might have positive impacts in some ways, it still needs to be banned as the
media
 always make use of those data to push their view,
however
,
this
 kind of
information
 contributes negative effects to human daily life. As far as I am concerned, society should ponder avoiding bloody and horrifying news for a healthier lifestyle and prevent injurious impacts.
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