In the past, people wore their traditional clothes and followed their culture.These days,most people wear similar clothes and therefore look very similar to one another. Do you think it is a positive or a negative development?

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A few decades ago,
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used to wear traditional dresses and symbolised their culture and identity. Nowadays, the dressing pattern is becoming increasingly uniform across different countries and I would claim that the merits of
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opportunity outnumber its demerits. and In the following paragraphs, I will explain the convenience and comfort of convenient and comfortable modern consumes and how it prevents discrimination in society as reasons for
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claim in the following paragraphs. Most
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wear modern
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which are produced faster and more affordably than traditional clothing and
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trend of modern costumes is economically profitable. The main reason for the popularity of wearing modern
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is that they are comfortable and convenient for many
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these days.
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such
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as shirts and trousers, make life convenient for
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especially in travelling or living abroad.
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, wearing similar outfits across regions prevents a lot of dress-based discrimination so that individuals feel a sense of unity with
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all over the world even though they have different religions and ways of life. Despite many benefits, there are some drawbacks to
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development,
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the possibility that ordinary
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including shirts and jeans mostly worn by many
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make
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lose connection to their ancestors.
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, those who wear normal
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western
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, are likely to neglect their culture and may not take pride in their region or nation.
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, traditional
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not only are not always suitable for every situation but
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are expensive and inconvenient for most
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in their respective
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.
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, traditional
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may lead to a loss of global diversity and
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cultural barrier among
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in society. To recapitulate, I firmly believe that the similar outfits
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as western and modern
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which are worn by most
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, make comfortable for
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in travelling and break
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barrier and reduce discrimination and traditional
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are not appropriate for every situation
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modern
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ignore their culture.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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