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Governments suits pain money on railways whether than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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Nowadays,
railways
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is
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are
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 modern means of transport mode compared to
roadlines
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road lines
. The Governing body should invest
money
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on
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in
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railways
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instead
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 of roads.
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, in my opinion, I completely agree
to
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with
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 the given statement and there are some reasons that are elaborated
in
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on in
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 the
further
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 paragraphs. To commence with, the
government
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 should invest
currency
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in currency
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 to enhance the
railway
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 lines. The main reason for
that is
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, it is very convenient compared to roads.
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, transferring goods and some essential materials is reliable in terms of safety and security.
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, it could be very easy and
budget friendly
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 for
government
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 to transfer expensive goods in massive sizes.
Government
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 should
also
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 think about electric
railways
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 which give
positive
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a positive
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 effect on
environment
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the environment
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 in order to reduce
the
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air pollution.
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, in terms of reliability,
National
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the National
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organisation
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organisations
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 should invest
money
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 to extend the
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railways
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railway's
railways'
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 capability.
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,
governing
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the governing
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 body should spend their income on
passenger's
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passenger
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railway
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railways
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. It could have
easy
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been easy
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 for those people in the country who facing the struggle while travelling
through
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along
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 roadways.
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, poor people can travel not only at cheap fares but
also
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 travel with different facilities after
government
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 spend their currency
in
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on
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railways
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.
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, the
government
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 should
also
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 think about to
improving
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 the function of
railway
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 stations for their passengers.
Therefore
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, if
money
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 should spend on
railwaylines
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railway lines
then
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 it could have
give
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given
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 positive effect
in
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on
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country's
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the country's
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 economy. In conclusion, in my opinion, I completely agree that governing body should think about
for
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apply
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spending
money
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 on the
railway
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 to increase their own economy as well as
citizen's
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citizens'
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 benefits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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