Many people are copying celebrities from magazines and on TV. Why this happening? Do you think it’s a good idea to copy celebrities?
It is hard to deny that in
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the especially
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the detrimental
this
trend will be enlightened in this
essay.
To begin
with, these days young people
are copying celebrities due to some factors. Fame and unique
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the unique
appearance
of renowned people
are pushing factors for youth
as they are more prone to be influenced. In order to beautify themselves and to attract others, youth
follow to wear brand clothes, jewelleries
or hairstyles which are used by celebrities. Change the wording
jewellery
pieces of jewellery
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the luxury
a luxury
people
also
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the attention
people
which itself
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, in turn,
urging
them to spend a larger amount of money on organising parties Wrong verb form
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wedding
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weddings
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in
luxury
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luxurious
Therefore
, aforementioned
reasons Correct article usage
the aforementioned
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for
towards
superstars among teenagers should not be ignored.
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However
, there are several negative influences of this
trend which
should be into consideration. Correct pronoun usage
that
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, young
generation is spending a great deal of money on expensive Add an article
the young
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garment
and jewellery or hairstyle and make-up or aesthetic Fix the agreement mistake
garments
operations
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spendings
are causing Fix the agreement mistake
spending
the
lack of money for their essential daily items which is resulting in stress-related issues including Correct article usage
a
the
sense of frustration, depression or even suicide of them. Correct article usage
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Moreover
, they are putting their life under threat because of experiencing a range of cosmetic operations
. Unfortunately, some of them are not successful to achieve their desired appearance
and are losing their real beauty accordingly
which is another cause of suicides
among teenagers. One girl from Iran, Fix the agreement mistake
suicide
for instance
, experienced countless operations
for being similar to Angelina Jolie but, instead
her appearance
is turned to
one of Change preposition
into
scary
vampire. In fact, her Correct article usage
a scary
appearance
was quite beautiful until these operations
. Thus
, young
generation should consider these negative effects before planning to do efforts for making themselves similar to prominent Correct article usage
the young
people
.
In conclusion, sparkling fame, attractive appearance
and luxury
lifestyle of celebrities are the main stimulators for Replace the word
luxurious
youth
to copy them which has negative impacts on both psychology
and finance of the Correct article usage
the psychology
youth
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