Success is often measured by wealth and material belongings. Do you think wealth is the best measure of success? What makes a successful person?

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materialism
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world, society tends to measure
people
’s
success
by fortune and materiality. In my opinion, I strongly agree that because
success
always brings treasure as well as luxury material
life
to
people
and I believe that environment generates a person who will be successful.
To begin
with,
success
brings
money
and luxury
life
to
people
automatically when we are
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succeeded
succeed
successes
. As many famous and popular careers are created by
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individuals, they own a great number of
money
and
also
acquire reputations.
For instance
, FaceBook, Taobao and Alibaba are established by successful
people
and
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huge
money
to them.
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,
successful
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person
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always
have
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great fortune and luxury materials accompany
with
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them.
In addition
, plenty of successful
people
are made by their growing environment wich are poverty or rich. Personally speaking,
environment
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which
are
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educations
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, families and friends, encouraging them to do hobbies or finding potential skills impacts individuals who achieve
success
.
Morovere
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, poverty situation
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individuals
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be
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full
of
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ambitious, they long
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to have
great
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life
;
hence
, they will try any method to acquire
successfulness
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.
For example
, one of my
friend
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had his own career now, because
of
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his parent always supported and encouraged him to do anything. Enhance, a person’s
successfulness
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is influenced by different
life
situations and
people
who
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around them. To sum up, some
of
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the
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people
not
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agree that measure
success
by how
many
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fortune
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fortunes
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and materials they owned, but I firmly agree that, because
those successful person
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that successful person
those successful people
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who
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we knew are owned huge wealth and good materials, and
the
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life
situations how effects them.
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