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In recent years, there has been a considerable rise in crimes committed by young people in cities. What has caused this ? What solutions can you suggest ?

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In the past few years , crime rates in metro cities have been increased among adults due to various reasons .In
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 issue, and
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 try to suggest some solutions to abolish
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 problem. The
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 reason behind the criminal mind of adults might be the unemployment in cities.Because it can be seen that in big cities competition in every sector is very high, and due to advancements in technology, almost in every business, humans are replaced by machines and has reduced the labour requirement which
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 accounts for unemployment. Unemployed adults
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 commit crimes in order to get money for their living. Another reason for the involvement of youth in crime could be their addiction to
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.A drug addict is not able to control his senses and can commit a crime if something does not happen according to their will.
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 year in Calgary, Alberta, a drug addict robbed a convenience store and stabbed the cashier because he was out of money and could not buy
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 for himself.
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, these problems can be solved with governmental actions.The government should create job opportunities in order to solve the problem of unemployment in the young generation. The solution of other problems related to
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 can be solved by educating youth about the consequences of
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 and the effects of
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 on their families and their future.
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, the government should take strict action against the people who sell these addictive products. To sum up,
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 is the right time to take steps in order to stop young ones from committing crimes,
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, in coming years,
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 situation will become worse and will be difficult to manage.
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