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Government should spend more on railways than roads. Do you agree or disagree with the statement.?

#government #railways #roads
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This
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 essay talks about the statement that government should spend more amount of money on
railways
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 over roads. I totally agree with
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 opinion. Let's discuss in detail the advantages and disadvantages of implementing that.
Firstly
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, we will talk about the advantages. As we
use
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 the train as a mode of
transport
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 for travelling to long-distance than a
car
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. Using public
transport
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 reduces the
travel
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 expenses as well as it's good for the environment. If we
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 a
car
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 for our mode of
transport
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 it becomes uneconomical and
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 it creates more pollution which is not suitable for the environment. So, the authorities should spend much amount on
railways
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. We can
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 get rid of traffic issues as well as road accidents if we invest more amount on
railways
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.
On the other hand
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, we
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 have some disadvantages. In case of an emergency, we need to
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 as fast as we can to get out of the situation. If we spend money only on developing
railways
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 we will suffer in those situations. We have a particular schedule for trains and we need to follow them but In the case of the
car
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, we can
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 it conveniently. If we want to
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 with more luggage it is not a good idea to
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 public
transport
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. In my opinion,
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 we have more comfort in using a
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 to get our work faster and smoother it affects the environment badly.The government should make sure that we can have trains frequently so that the waiting time will not bother people to
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such
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 kind of
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. So, I totally agree with the opinion of spending money on
railways
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 is a good idea.
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