Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cell phone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages.

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Nowadays,
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has been significantly developed to serve the
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more conveniently and
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, the consequence of advanced
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is that it is being used to track
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people
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. In my opinion, I believe that the advantage overcomes the disadvantage.
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with,
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has played an important role in our lives. Most
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rely on it for various reasons,
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as working and travelling.
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, when it is being used to monitor
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people
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, It’s necessary to draw a line between
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and safety. In my point of view, tracking
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in public or in
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personal area is acceptable,
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, using a security
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can prevent the criminal. According to the survey conducted in Thailand, the burglar will most likely choose to rob the house without a security
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rather than the one with a
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is because their face will be captured by a
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. As a consequence, the police can easily track the thief and arrest them.
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technology
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must respect
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privacy
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. I believe that no one should be tracked when they’re not in public.
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internet should not be tracked by any authority. There should be
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privacy
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as long as you’re not causing any harm to the public.
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, The information
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from tracking a person has been used for
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without our consent,
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as
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our browsing history. It is being used to adjust an advertisement to make it most related so that there
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more
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the product can be sold. In conclusion, there has to be a line between
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and safety. The information should not be acquired without
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consent.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Surveillance
  • 2. Monitoring
  • 3. Cell phone tracking
  • 4. Security cameras
  • 5. Public safety
  • 6. Law enforcement
  • 7. Privacy concerns
  • 8. Personal freedom
  • 9. Autonomous
  • 10. Breach of trust
  • 11. Misuse of information
  • 12. Institutional integrity
  • 13. Psychological impact
  • 14. Mental well-being
  • 15. Societal trust
  • 16. Paranoia
  • 17. Transparency
  • 18. Stringent regulations
  • 19. Criminal deterrence
  • 20. Apprehension of criminals
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