Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cell phone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages.
Nowadays,
technology
has been significantly developed to serve the people
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However
, the consequence of advanced technology
is that it is being used to track the
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people
. In my opinion, I believe that the advantage overcomes the disadvantage.
To begin
with, technology
has played an important role in our lives. Most people
rely on it for various reasons, such
as working and travelling. However
, when it is being used to monitor the
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people
, It’s necessary to draw a line between privacy
and safety. In my point of view, tracking people
in public or in the
personal area is acceptable, Correct article usage
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for example
, using a security camera
can prevent the criminal. According to the survey conducted in Thailand, the burglar will most likely choose to rob the house without a security camera
rather than the one with a camera
. This
is because their face will be captured by a camera
. As a consequence, the police can easily track the thief and arrest them.
On the other hand
, the
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technology
must respect the
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privacy
. I believe that no one should be tracked when they’re not in public. For instance
, surfing an
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privacy
as long as you’re not causing any harm to the public. Furthermore
, The information that is
from tracking a person has been used for various
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such
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