Students should choose a university major that prepares them for high-paying careers. To what extent do you agree with this statement?
Choosing a university major is one of the crucial
decision
a student should make because it affects an individual’s future. Some proposed that one should take up a course that may lead to money-making careers. Fix the agreement mistake
decisions
However
, I oppose this
idea.
Firstly
, people should pursue a degree where
they are passionate Correct word choice
which
and
talentedChange preposition
about and
with
. Persons who have passion Change preposition
apply
on
their college degree and have talent related to their major are more motivated to work hard. Change preposition
for
Hence
, if they study what they desire, it is more possible to be successful and earn a lot of money. For example
, a person who is excellent in drawings and designs will not take up medicine. Instead
, he or she will enroll
Change the spelling
enrol
to
architecture. Change preposition
on
Then
, he/she will use more of his time to be great in his
works Change the pronoun
the
that
will lead him to be Correct pronoun usage
which
profitable
architect.
Add an article
a profitable
Secondly
, monetary benefits should not the only factor to be considered in choosing a course for employment. Humanity should also
be regarded. Nowadays, the world needs more people who could help in solving our planet’s problems. Consequently
, students should take a path that could lead them to a career related to developing ways to prevent climate change or discover
medications that could cure current diseases. For an instance, one can take up medicine and devote his/her time Wrong verb form
discovering
in
treating patients.
In conclusion, I totally disagree Change preposition
to
to
the notion that students should pick out a college major that will only give them Change preposition
with
high
salary. Add an article
a high
Instead
, other factors like passion, talent and humaneness should be think
about too.Change the verb form
be thinking
be thought
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