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Students should choose a university major that prepares them for high-paying careers. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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Choosing a university major is one of the crucial
decision
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 a student should make because it affects an individual’s future. Some proposed that one should take up a course that may lead to money-making careers.
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, I oppose
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 idea.
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, people should pursue a degree
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 they are passionate
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 talented
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. Persons who have passion
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 their college degree and have talent related to their major are more motivated to work hard.
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, if they study what they desire, it is more possible to be successful and earn a lot of money.
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, a person who is excellent in drawings and designs will not take up medicine.
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, he or she will
enroll
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to
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 architecture.
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, he/she will use more of his time to be great in
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 will lead him to be
profitable
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 architect.
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, monetary benefits should not the only factor to be considered in choosing a course for employment. Humanity should
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 be regarded. Nowadays, the world needs more people who could help in solving our planet’s problems.
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, students should take a path that could lead them to a career related to developing ways to prevent climate change or
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 medications that could cure current diseases. For an instance, one can take up medicine and devote his/her time
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 treating patients. In conclusion, I totally disagree
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 the notion that students should pick out a college major that will only give them
high
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 salary.
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, other factors like passion, talent and humaneness should
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 about too.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • university major
  • high paying careers
  • long-term satisfaction
  • fulfillment
  • factors
  • potential
  • income
  • passion
  • interest
  • success
  • job satisfaction
  • transferable skills
  • balance
  • personal interests
  • financial stability
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