Some people think that dangerous sports should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Sport has been
practiced
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in societies for millennia.
However
, whereas some people argue that risky
sports
should be prohibited, I would argue that, while it is worth
to consider
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, its positive impact should not be neglected. Those who argue that high-risk
sports
can be fatal should be made illegal despite
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significant impact on society might point to its consequences. They may have an opinion that people who play adventure
sports
are irresponsible and view it as selfish behaviour.
This
is simply because
,
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such
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act
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can cause great grief to their families and friends if they lose their lives while engaged in risky
sports
.
For example
,
parachute
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may fail to open when an
athelete
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athlete
is already jumped off
the
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plane to take part in skydiving, plummeted from thousand metres high to the ground and got killed instantaneously.
As a result
, opponents of high-risk
sports
urge the government to these
sports
.
Nevertheless
, my view is that all
sports
provide crucial physical and psychological
health
benefits for society, which is vast and undeniable.
To begin
with the former, doing
sports
help in
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heart function, control blood sugar levels, and lower the risks of cancer. As for the latter,
sport
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has been shown to boost self-esteem, reduce stress levels, and enhance resilience. If,
for instance
, the governments made extreme
sports
as
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illegal activities, people would have
find
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it difficult to find a new one to replace their favourite
sports
which they may have been doing
it
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for a long period, in turn,
this
can cause an adverse
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affect
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to
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their personal
health
as well as become a burden to
health
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sector. In conclusion, because of the sizeable influence
which
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sport can have on public
health
, it is my firm belief that banning extreme
sports
cannot be treated as one solution for all in spite of
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threaning
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threatening
it can bring.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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