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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. ​ To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Gender equality is a major issue in entire the globe.In every
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 ,factor both
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 and women should be received in all thesis. The essay will discuss both concerns and addresses.I advocate all points on the latter. A certain portion of the population believes that the
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 system is changing significantly since the old era. In the past generation , guardians were always preferred to educate
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 not Women Because they had a fixed mindset for the boys that they all are the backbone of the house.
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, Nowadays almost every single girl is going to schools and universities for higher
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 they competed with the boys in many different subjects , jobs and many more. It is frequently contended that the female does more hard work rather than
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 .For ,example everyone's mothers because they handle the whole family
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 go to the workplace and do eight to ten hours shift , come back home and upbringing their kids as well.
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 , there are no doubt
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 do extreme jobs in their lives and earn for the family and giving them luxury life for them. The biggest example of a father who has seniority in the house and plays a vital role in families' lives. To conclude , I would love to say that
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 is everyone's right to have and put themselves on the bright path. The government should support both genders in the
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 sector.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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