Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth rather than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To What extent do you agree or disagree?

The current generation of famous personalities
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known more for their attractive lifestyle and less for
hardwork
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hard work
which I believe is misleading the youngsters. I will explain in
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extravagant
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lifestyle of a celebrity
instead
of focusing on their work can leave a wrong impression on the youth.
Firstly
, the living style
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by the
well known
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people
sets unrealistic goals and standards for an average person.
Moreover
, the importance is given to the looks and style of clothes rather than the
succesful
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successful
art which
also
results in
people
spending unnecessary money on expensive beauty and health products. The youngsters try to look like these stars by using overpriced materialistic things and
hence
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loose
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their focus on studies and their
career
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. There are multiple online websites that
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the exact clothes used by
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celebrities
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an astonishing price range. With
such
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a young person gets influenced easily and
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a misguided life.
Secondly
, the overshow of the luxurious way of life of a famous personality leads the
people
to
beleive
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believe
that the
hardwork
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hard work
is the least
imprortant
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important
part of their success. Their talent and artistic work
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overshadowed by their media presence. As we all know,
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social media has been an intimate medium to get
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access to a celebrities life which is
mostly
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deceiving.
Although
, the purpose of these stars is to motivate
people
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they end up leaving a bad example of putting the glam above the job. In conclusion, I fully agree that by putting the excess expenditure of money and a luxurious lifestyle as the centre of attention, the famous
people
are misguiding our present youth.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • glamour
  • wealth
  • achievements
  • portrayed
  • overshadow
  • influenced
  • lifestyles
  • unrealistic
  • expectations
  • values
  • promoting
  • hard work
  • perseverance
  • inspire
  • positive impact
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