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Some believe that nuclear weapons benefit the world at large. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In today’s
world
, nuclear arsenals have been playing a crucial role in humanity.
Furthermore
, it is argued that it has some merits to the
world
 to large extent;
however
, from my angle,I strongly disagree with
this
 notion since it can conducive to some probable serious problems in people’s life. On the one hand, nuclear bombs can be clearly viewed as contributing to becoming the end of the
world
 in some cases.
Besides
, not only does it destroy the
world
’s safety, but
also
 it has detrimental impacts on the
next
 generation’s life.
Moreover
, what
this
 entails is that health issues could be observed just like in the Hiroshima incident.To illustrate, it is a known terminal disease that cancer is terminated by an atomic bomb.
Additionally
,
this
 disease spread to the Black Sea of Turkey ,
besides
, people influenced by cancer suffered for a long period of time.
As a result
, if the tremendous effects of the atomic bomb are remembered by people, they will understand why it is harmful to the
world
.
On the other hand
, some countries that have nuclear weapons are a threat to others by virtue of the conflict between the countries. What is more, these governments cannot reach a consensus on borders, thereby, they frighten their worldwide citizens by using bombs.
For instance
, nowadays people are faced with a cold war between Russia and Ukraine, and in some
cases
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 Putin, who is the leader of Russia indicates to use their nuclear arsenals. Taking everything into account, having considered the negative sides of nuclear weapons, it has no beneficial features to the
earthas
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earth as
earths
 well as our humankind.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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