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Nowadays, people have little awareness of the importance of the natural world. what are the reasons, and how people can learn about the natural world

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In the 21st century, society focus on economic development rather than environmental protection. No matter how many warnings,
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 as earthquakes, climate change, or soil erosion, are given by the
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, people ignore those and only focus on making money by harming the environment. It is
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 a tragedy.
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, why does the public do so? The main reason is materialism. People start to achieve a better lifestyle by buying more products or earning more money. With
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 thought, the public awareness of protecting
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 drops.
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, to satisfy the customers, the businessman needs to find more raw materials. If the public gets a huge demand for buying fur. The businessman satisfies their clients by killing more foxes so that they can earn more. In long term, the foxes are extinction and the ecosystem is damaged. Meanwhile, in some cases, in order to meet the global clients' desire to make more profit, pollution is made during manufacturing products.
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, factories release nitrogen oxide or dioxide when they are producing. These pollutants are
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 in the river and foster micro-organisms. Soon, the amount of micro-organisms increases and takes all the oxygen supply in the lake. In long term, other species in the lake suffocate and the life cycle is ruined.
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 is why materialism results in disaster to the environment.
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,
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 is important as it relates to millions of living creatures, including humans. In order to protect the natural world, we should learn more about it.
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 with, education should be provided. Hardly can adults actively know more about the environment, especially when they are totally attracted by profit only. So, educating the youths is critical. The mind of protecting the world should be settled down earlier by leading them to discover the adorable creatures and the beauty of
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.
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, a trip to the zoo is organised for kids and the tutor will introduce different animals to them.
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, another way to learn about the natural world is through TV programmes. Recently, the BBC has released thousands of shows which are about
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,
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 as topics about the rainforest, the desert, and the waterfalls. The unique or endangered creatures are introduced in the show so as to remind the public how humans affect their life negatively.
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, the life cycle in these places is introduced too by playing how whales eat fish and polar bears kill seals. In long term, protecting
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 should be advertised.
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, humans may be the following extinct species as everything is in karma. You harm
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 and
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 harms you.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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