Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?
Charging
people
when they enter a public place is a great source of income for the government. Though
some Correct word choice
Although
museums
have been issuing the public an entrance fee while many others are free of charge
. So, this
has been always a subject of debate whether letting people
visit museums
for free, or for a fee.
Those museums
that charge
people
have brought some benefits to the government. They are a great source of income. Though we can see that some of them
account for a noticeable proportion of the GDP. Change the pronoun
their
In addition
, such
museums
can preserve their collection of statues and artefacts, while having few visitors
, because, more visitors
mean more danger to such
valuable stuff. For instance
, certain museums
have not been open to the public and were only open to researchers.
On the other hand
, there are some significant disadvantages to museums
that have put a fee for their visitors
. They usually attract fewer visitors
compared to the other museums
. Consequently
, attracting no visitors
means they have failed in their task, because, museums
tend to have visitors
in order to conduct information to the public. On the contrary
, free of charge
museums
have the advantage of widely educating people
. For example
, guides who work at museums
can be great instructors for visitors
.
In conclusion, although
certain museums
that charge
for admission are a great source of income for governments, they have failed in their task that was attracting visitors
. In my opinion, all museums
must have a public area for people
to visit without paying for admission, while charging people
for having a visit to their important artefacts. However
, it's not applicable to all museums
, but I'm sure more museums
will be thinking more deeply about this
in the near future.Submitted by amirreza.alise on
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