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Globalisation is considered by some to be a positive phenomenon for everyone involved, but not so by others. What is involved in the globalisation process and to what extent do you think its effects can be considered as positive?

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Some
people
 consider
globalization
 to be a good thing for everyone involved, while others disagree.
Therefore
, I believe that
globalization
 is a positive thing and I will try to explain some of the positive phenomenons of
globalization
.
First
 of all, I see
globalization
 as a thing that gives
people
 the opportunity to buy products from all over the
world
 even though they are living in different countries.
For example
,
people
 in Germany can go to the grocery store and easily buy avocados grown in Mexico (avocados aren't grown in Germany due to the cold climate there) and make guacamole with them.
Furthermore
, through the internet
idividual
Correct your spelling
individual
 can access worldwide sources of information. That means when someone looks for a recipe to make guacamole, they can click to see millions of recipes from all over the
world
.
This
 is why I believe
globalization
 is a positive force rather than a negative force.
Secondly
,
globalization
 allows
people
 to
travel
 all across the
world
.
In other words
,
people
 now have the opportunity to
travel
 to all continents of the
world
, which was not the case in the past.
For instance
, when I want to
travel
 to New York City because I want to visit my friends there, I just need to take the
next
 plane. It takes me nine hours to get there.
Thus
,
this
 is another advantage that
globalization
 offers
people
 today. In conclusion, I strongly believe that
globalization
 is a positive thing and not a bad thing because it gives
people
 the opportunity to purchase products from other countries. It
also
 enables them to learn about the
world
's cuisine and enables them to
travel
 all over the globe at any time.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • International integration
  • Cross-border trade
  • Multinational corporations
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Interconnectedness
  • Economic disparity
  • Technological proliferation
  • Global governance
  • Sustainable development
  • Cultural diversity
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