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Globalisation is considered by some to be a positive phenomenon for everyone involved, but not so by others. What is involved in the globalisation process and to what extent do you think its effects can be considered as positive?

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Some
people
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 consider
globalization
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 to be a good thing for everyone involved, while others disagree.
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, I believe that
globalization
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 is a positive thing and I will try to explain some of the positive phenomenons of
globalization
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.
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 of all, I see
globalization
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 as a thing that gives
people
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 the opportunity to buy products from all over the
world
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 even though they are living in different countries.
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,
people
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 in Germany can go to the grocery store and easily buy avocados grown in Mexico (avocados aren't grown in Germany due to the cold climate there) and make guacamole with them.
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, through the internet
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individual
 can access worldwide sources of information. That means when someone looks for a recipe to make guacamole, they can click to see millions of recipes from all over the
world
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.
This
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 is why I believe
globalization
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 is a positive force rather than a negative force.
Secondly
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,
globalization
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 allows
people
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 to
travel
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 all across the
world
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.
In other words
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,
people
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 now have the opportunity to
travel
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 to all continents of the
world
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, which was not the case in the past.
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, when I want to
travel
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 to New York City because I want to visit my friends there, I just need to take the
next
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 plane. It takes me nine hours to get there.
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,
this
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 is another advantage that
globalization
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 offers
people
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 today. In conclusion, I strongly believe that
globalization
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 is a positive thing and not a bad thing because it gives
people
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 the opportunity to purchase products from other countries. It
also
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 enables them to learn about the
world
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's cuisine and enables them to
travel
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 all over the globe at any time.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • International integration
  • Cross-border trade
  • Multinational corporations
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Interconnectedness
  • Economic disparity
  • Technological proliferation
  • Global governance
  • Sustainable development
  • Cultural diversity
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