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Nowadays many people travel to foreign countries for pleasure. Some believe this travel has a negative impact on the countries travelled to. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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 days, a huge number of
people
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 journey abroad for their enjoyment. While, part of
people
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 consider that, travelling to foreign
countries
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 has a negative effect for places where
people
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 visited. I strongly agree with
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impact
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the impact
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 of
people
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to
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countries
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 often show with their
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such
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polluting
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, local concern.
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, it is clear that
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 citizens go abroad in order to relax from their daily staff, even more
countries
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 offer facilities to tourists.
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environment
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 pollution is
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 and usual issue in today’s world.
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, all
countries
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 around the world should prevent it and
to
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deal with it they made rules, which are violated by migrants. Some
people
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 believe that
,
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 tourists do not care about other
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countries
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countries'
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 natural environment, while some inadequate
person
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people
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 do not even think about protecting it.
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, pollution of cities
are
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 rising day by day, because of
lack
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the lack
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 of knowledge of individuals. On
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, it is obvious that
,
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 most
of
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people
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the people
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 want to enjoy
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other spot’s spectacular
view
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views
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 and nature.
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, if residents do not have
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 facilities and objects in
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their own
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 country, they try to visit places where they are not been.
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,
countries
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 offer facilities to attract individuals to visit their cities, in order to make rise their
economy
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 status. To sum up, individuals want to journey to other
countries
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 for pleasure, to feel something new and intriguing in their life. Despite
the
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this
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 fact, it is vital to not forget about our
surrounding
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surroundings
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 for places which gave options for tourists,
also
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 for each person.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural exchanges
  • Global connections
  • Tourism boosts
  • Local economy
  • Over-tourism
  • Environmental degradation
  • Landmarks
  • Commodification of culture
  • Authentic cultural expressions
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Tourism infrastructure
  • Public services
  • Disrespect local customs
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