Write a letter to friend to inform them of a celebration you are having for a recent job promotion. Include information about The promotion The celebration Their accomodation

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Dear Manoj I am writing a letter for giving surprising you. I have made a plan to gather with friends coming Monday. so, I will meet you in the location that I have mentioned u below. Monoj, I am really happy with my job because my company has promoted me

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1st class officer from 2nd class. At

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happy moment, I have made a plan for a great celebration with you and other friends in the "Royal Hotel" where we

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celebrated Suresh's birthday

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month. we had really enjoyed

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ourselves at

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that time in

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hotel. so, It was my choice. You know that coming Monday when we are going to celebrate is a holiday. I am sure that you will be with me.

Forthermore

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Furthermore

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have planned that all night going to be a fire-night with not only cutting hen and drinking alcohol but

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singing and dancing.

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friends too who always made plans to go

outings

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. That's why

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I have managed

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accommodation for us which will be only for us. At

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, I would like to say that do not

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this

occasational

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party. we have to get as much as enjoy with our

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for us. yours sincerely Bimal

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

215 words

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Write a letter to friend to inform them of a celebration you are having for a recent job promotion. Include information about The promotion The celebration Their accomodation

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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