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IELTS 15 Some people say that advertising is extremely successluf at preduading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion.

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The diagram illustrates the key stages in the method of making instant
noodles
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. Overall, the process consists of converting
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 to edible
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cups
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 through a series of stages.
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, the stored
flour
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 is converted into dough
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, nextly these
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 are cooked and dried, processing
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and driving them toward the
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 stage, placing them in
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cups
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, dressing them with vegetables and species, finalising with their labelling and sealing.
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 with,
flour
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 is stored in storage silos, ready for its usage.
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 the
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 is mixed together with water and oil in enormous mixing pots, resulting in dough
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, made by long rollers that moulded the obtained mix.
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, the produced
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 are
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 and rolled up in disco shaped
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, preparing them for their cocction.
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, the disk-shaped
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 are cooked using oil, getting dried and eliminating the extra oil from them. The dried cooked disks are now stored in
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cups
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 and are mixed with different vegetables and species.
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, the prepared
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 are labelled and sealed, ready for its consumption.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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