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Some people fail in school, but end up being successful in life. Why do you think that is the case? What is the most important thing to succeed in life?

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There is no guarantee that after completing higher
education
 ,you will be successful and vice versa, failing in school means unsuccessful because there is no direct link between
education
 and
success
.
Success
 depends on hard work,determination and the use of available opportunities to the fullest.So failure in grades is not the end of the
carrier
 but it is the start of a new path. Though
education
 plays a vital role in one's
carrier
,It does not guarantee that you should have a bright future.There are a number of examples in real
life
 that having an
education
carrier
 with high scores and medals but struggling in professional
life
 in the monetary sense.
On the other hand
 with basic or little
education
,there are successful businessmen who run businesses, make fortune and deploy a large number of educated people in their industry.Jack ma the Chinese business tycoon is the greatest example of a person with minimum
education
 who has created a company.
success
 requires strong will, an open mind and eyes plus strong efforts to achieve the target using all the resources.The greatest use of the smallest available opportunity is the key factor for positive development.The better you capture and utilize it,the more successful will be your
life
 as there is no shortcut to
success
. American president John Kennedy lost three times in elections before becoming the president. In conclusion,
Success
 depends on a number of factors and
education
 is only one of them,
therefore
 failing in school should be taken as a challenge.Working on other aspects for a positive
life
 and with persistence and hard work anyone can build a prospective
carrier
.
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