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Writing Samples
Band 7.5

Your car insurance company has told you that they are going to increase the amount you have to pay in insurance for your car each month. You are not happy about this. Write a letter to your insurance company. In your letter explain Why you are writing to them Why you think the insurance should not be increased What you want them to

Dear Sir, I am writing
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 letter to express my dissatisfaction with the recent increase in my November
insurance
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 costs and why I think it is not justified to increase it. I
also
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 want to request that the
insurance
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 costs be reduced for customers. My name is Fagbenro Adekunbi. I bought a car in 2010. I have been a loyal customer of
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 company for many years , and I think
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 is unfair to me and other loyal customers to increase the
insurance
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 cost without claiming any of its benefits.
This
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 rise will discourage both new and old from paying their premium cost. Another reason why the rise is not fair to the clients is the current economic situation.
Due to
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 the bad economic situation of the country. It would be difficult for people , including me , to afford higher payments.
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 , with these reasons listed above , I hope the company will reconsider the
insurance
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 costs for its clients , especially the loyal customers. Thank you for your time and consideration I look forward to your reply Yours faithfully, Adekunbi

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structure
Make one idea in each paragraph. Start with why you write, then give one reason, then say what you want.
content
Be clear on what you ask. Ask for a lower price or for a change that helps loyal customers.
grammar
Fix long and mixed sentences. Use full stops and simple words.
tone
Keep a formal voice all through the letter. Use 'please' and 'thank you' as needed.
clarity
Use short, clear lines. The letter should be easy to read.
content
Clear aim: you tell who you are and what you want.
tone
Polite close: you finish kindly.
content
You give a reason for your view.
Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • insurance
  • increase
  • pay
  • car
  • customer
  • loyal
  • premium
  • claims
  • driving record
  • economic
  • afford
  • reconsider
  • rates
  • payment
  • letter
  • dissatisfaction
  • justify
  • situation
  • request
  • years
  • harder
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