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Nowadays on-line shopping has become more popular than in-store shopping. Is it a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience.

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 ,century people's shopping habits have changed a lot , especially among the younger generation.They prefer buying things on the
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 rather than going to malls in person.
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 trend has benefits as well as drawbacks which I am going to discuss in the forthcoming paragraphs.
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 transformation in shopping is a negative development for society and for individuals. During the period of the coronavirus pandemic when everyone was remaining at a home due to government-imposed lock-down purchasing online came as a boon.People were able to get their required items from the
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 platform and delivered them to their doorstep.Buying on the
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 is cheaper and more convenient through providing a wide range of variety for selection.
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 type of window purchase saves time,money and effort as can be done from the comfort of your home.One survey demonstrated that web-based businesses made 70% more profit in the pandemic era. On the
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 ,shopping there is no personal interaction which dampens the interactive skills of the younger generation.Local shops and wenders face a decline in their sales over to online giants like Amazon and eBay which give rise to unemployment.At times citizens got cheated by receiving inferior quality products or credit card fraud. A survey by times magazine demonstrated that half of the shoppers are not satisfied with the quality of goods received online. In ,conclusion online shopping is good in the monetary sense for individuals but harmful to their emotional and intellectual development,
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 it disrupts the local supply chain giving rise to job loss in localities.so in length,run it is a disadvantage for society in a whole.
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