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In the future, students may have the choice of studying at home by using technology such as computers or television or of studying at traditional schools. Which would you prefer? Use reasons and specific details to explain your choice.

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Studying with
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 latest technology in the house or the old way of attending school,what would the
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 choose in the future? I will choose the way of attending the school and interacting with the teachers and explain with some examples in
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 of all,
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 are mostly to be trained with
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hands-on sessions for better understanding. It is said that they are to be carefully trained with the experts
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 the studies on live interaction in which teachers can understand
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what they must be trained to improve the level for their future. or else
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 will not be more interacted with trainers
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 online classes.
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, When
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 are attending
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classes
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 computers, teachers will not be able to identify their proper
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 and clarify doubts
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 studies.
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,
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 can involve themselves in other
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 with can develop them in work and coordinate with others.
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,
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 can participate in extra-curriculum
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the building and
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 on health and knowledge of thinking.
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, Schools organise cultural and sports events to involve
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 in different
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such
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 as dancing, acting, running and team practising, which will create an awareness among
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 about what they are eligible for and In which they are interested. These
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 make them prepare themselves to get involved with the outside world people other than organisations which studying at home will not provide. In conclusion,
Students
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 studying in the old ways than through the latest technology will provide better understanding through hands-on sessions and
also
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 develop with extra-curricular
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