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Some Government believe it is necessary to impose a high tax on junk food because an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much of this type of food. What do you think about this?

As the consumption of sugary, fat and salty
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 is on the rise, related illnesses
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 as diabetes, and heart attack are
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 raising. Some
people
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 feel that it is mandatory to levy a hefty
tax
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 to reduce the intake of junk
food
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.
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 essay will discuss why I believe it is beneficial and lead to more money for
health
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 services as well as discouraging the consumption of unhealthy
food
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. The primary reason why imposing a heavy
tax
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 on junk
food
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 is a good idea is because it would increase revenue to the Government which can be leveraged on medical services. Indeed,
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 has been the case with taxes on alcohol and tobacco products in the UK where the
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 from the sale of cigarettes has been diverted to treat patients with smoking-related diseases
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 as lung cancer, as well as to fund advertising campaigns to deter smokers.
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, taxes on fast
food
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 could be used in the same way.
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 to
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, increasing the
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 on unhealthy foods would raise prices,
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, it would significantly reduce the consumption of fast
food
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.
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, a McDonald's burger which used to cost $3 may now cost $10 resulting in
the
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 dramatic reduction in the number of
people
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 who can afford fast
food
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 .
Thus
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, illnesses related to obesity will reduce which will improve overall public
health
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. In conclusion, poor
health
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 choices will affect
people
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's
health
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 leading to numerous diseases. An increase in the
tax
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 on unhealthy
food
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 will not only reduce the amount of fast good that most
people
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 afford to buy but
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 improves the revenue of the Government to focus on public
health
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.

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