Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, inspite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
A number of individuals assert that numerous masses enjoyed their childhood period
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of juveniles is more enjoyable rather than adults as they are free like a bird and do not have any responsibility on their shoulders during Use synonyms
this
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as well as
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For example
,when I was a teen usually I took money and other things from my parents .Linking Words
Moreover
,I didn't have a tension for anything in my Linking Words
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as I utterly depended on my parent's decision.Use synonyms
Hence
,children can live their lives freely Linking Words
as well as
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also
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Therefore
,they take every challenge as a task and complete it with full effort as they are enough mature to make wise decisions. Linking Words
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groups are too mature and lead their lives happily without any interference from others,I believe , that childhood Use synonyms
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as compared to adulthood.Use synonyms
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