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Band 6.5

You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter •Correct the information in the article •Explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information •Suggest what the magazine should do about this situation.

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Dear sir:
This
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 letter is to inform you about the publication of wrong information in your magazine about my city which organized the international football game
last
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 week and I am writing to elaborate.
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,You have mentioned the violence and drinking alcohol during the match,
therefore
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,in my city drinking alcoholic beverages Is forbidden
due to
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 the Islamic religion and we have strict Rules for these things.
Secondly
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, violence in matching and sports normally happens because of the competition between the fans, so what happened was
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 not physical.
This
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 incorrect information has had a negative impact on my hometown by declining its reputation.
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, people believe whatever read an international magazine like yours even if it’s true or false. I propose that you
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re-publish a new article to correct any information and I could help you if you want to write an article about my city and provide you with the correct document. looking forward to promoting action. Faithfully yours. Enas

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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure each paragraph presents a clear central topic, and use a variety of cohesive devices to link ideas within and across paragraphs.
Task Achievement
Expand on the main points and provide more detailed explanations or examples.
Writing Tone
Maintain a formal tone throughout the letter and mind the use of informal expressions when addressing the editor.
Logical Structure
Focus on a more structured progression of ideas with clear introductory and concluding statements.
Greeting & Closing
Use appropriate salutations and sign-offs for formal letters and ensure they are consistent with the rest of the tone of the letter.
Single Idea per Paragraph
Organize the letter into clear paragraphs, each dedicated to a single idea or aspect of the response.

Contractions

Formal and informal language refers to using different forms of language in different settings.

In informal writing, you can use contractions such as I’ll and Сan’t.

In formal writing, you should write I will and Can not.

Do not use exclamation mark in formal writing, but you can use it in informal writing.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Erroneous
  • Misrepresentation
  • Journalistic integrity
  • Verification
  • Retraction
  • Accountability
  • Fact-checking
  • Accuracy
  • Credibility
  • Rectify
  • Implications
  • Corrections column
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