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smoking can cause serious illness and should be made illegal. To what extend do you agree?

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One of the most concerning topics over many decades is the consumption of cigarettes. Smoking has made a drastic impact on the health of all age groups. The consumption of
this
 drug can cause serious health issues and should be banned by lawmakers at once. In the essay, I shall discuss the negative effects of having it and why it should be banned. To start with, Puffing the leaves with high levels of nicotine will make people get addicted to it. In the long run, it is leading to severe damage to the lungs of the consumers and many people are
also
 suffering from mouth cancers.
For Example
, we all are aware that smoking is the reason that has to be blamed for the increase in the number of mouth cancer cases.
This
 daily feeding of harmful substances to the body is making the respiratory systems of humans weak.
Although
 it plays a prominent role in revenue generation for governing authorities, there is a peak need now to ban it all over. It is no longer the issue concerned with adults as many young children are
also
 getting habituated to these bad habits and neglecting their studies which should be addressed on an immediate basis now. Considering all the new effects these cigars can make on the health of consumers like lung damage, cancers and improper functioning of the respiratory system , the lawmakers should take strict and quick actions to make sure that these products are banned and should impose punishments if found to be consumed by any people.
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