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Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both sides of this argument and give your own opinion.

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this
 essay illustrates an argument about a beneficial trend of the computer-based class, and some others consider negative consequences. But for me, I believe computer-based learning programs will lead to drawbacks in our education quality.
Firstly
, Some people believe digitalized training is a positive trend in various conditions,
such
 as saving time for both admission and facilities, increasing educational opportunities for disabilities, and higher job guarantees for IT-related positions. the best part of an online course is people can take their classes regardless of location or time, which leads both students and teachers can save time.
Moreover
,
this
 learning method
also
 encourages many folks with disabilities who can not move freely.
Lastly
, growing awareness of
this
 course will lead to higher career opportunities for numerous crowds.
On the other hand
, I believe the computer-based class will lead to bad consequences in several sectors of enlistment learning ability
such
 as downgrading reading ability, a lack of social skills, and lower understanding of their study. Most online courses are based on the internet, so admission can easily distract by bright monitors to read a long lecture, which makes them have
poor
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 reading ability.
In addition
, no interaction with colleagues in an online course can cause insufficient social skills. on top of that, computer-based education has a limited meeting section between pupils and their teachers, which leads pupils to have a poor understanding. In conclusion, I believe uprising digitalized education programs will lead to drawbacks impacts on student learning skills even though people prise online classes as a positive trend.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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