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in some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. why this might be the case? do u think this a positive or negative situation?

In
this
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 contemporary world, purchasing a
house
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 is considered an essential task for an adult. Meanwhile, it is often thought to be a bad idea to
rent
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 an apartment rather than
buying
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buy
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 it. I will be discussing the pros and cons. These days, there are lots of aspects which make people's minds occupied;
therefore
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, one of them is accommodation which is a basic need of every human. One of the major points of owning a home is the fact that your stress will be reduced due to several reasons.
Firstly
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, when u
rent
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 a
house
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 it would be hard to feel
like
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at
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 "home" or you don't feel secure since it is someone else's property.
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, there are different limits associated with
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such
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 as not being able to do adjustments, or it is not possible for you to design your own
house
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, and the worriedness about the contract;
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, they may increase the payment, or even try to sell the
house
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.
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, it would be difficult to save money as you have a part of your salary going directly for
rent
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 each month.
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, it is crystal clear that renting a home is the best possible option, especially in the cities, like Tehran where houses are too expensive, renting is the way to go.
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, it would not be your responsibility to maintain the place
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 it will not cause a financial burden.
Also
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, for
travelers
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travellers
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, to
rent
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 a place would be easy to move in and move out. In conclusion, there are many reasons that encourage citizens to purchase their own residence, and
this
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 trend provides more advantages compared to some drawbacks that it might bring.

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